Note: your routine was very good, but by posting it, saying how awesome it is and how it won in a competition, I'm going to pick it apart. Sorry, it's just how I am. These are some things I noticed.
1. It's great that you want to be heard, but there's no reason to yell... it gets annoying.
2. What was the point of showing no King on the top and no King on the bottom, then mixing the cards up? Just doesn't make much sense to me.
3. Throughout instead of being entertaining, you were narrating what you you were doing. "I'm going to place these Kings here." "I'm going to turn over this card." We know, we're not stupid... we can see what you were doing.
4. Stop saying "Just like that." It gets annoying after the hundredth time.
5. The wrist kill at the end was very overdone, when you took the Ace at the bottom.
Other than those things, it was actually pretty good. Just to let you know, it wasn't my intention to be mean or harsh, just helpful. It has the potential to be a very good routine, it just needs the kinks worked out of the technical side and the presentational side.
Also, you might want to work on a different Kings production... or at least structure yours differently. Like I said earlier, it kind of confused me when you showed no Kings on the top or bottom, cut them into the middle, and then almost immediately cut back to the same exact spot. Just seemed obvious and overproven to me.
And just one other thing before I leave you alone: ditch the tattoo. It's not believable that a kid your age has a tattoo, which prompts the statement, "So it's a temporary tattoo, which means he made me pick that card." It would prompt the same statement with a real tattoo, as well. So I say ditch the tattoo part. But that's just me, opinions vary, and you may decide to keep it.
