I'm guessing you are being sarcastic because
@ChrisJGJ's post was not intended to be humorous. If that is the case, I think that the sarcastic response is unwarranted.
Chris and the others who have replied on this thread have given you valid and constructive criticism. It has to be a bit uncomfortable to hear that something you thought was amazing isn't as quite good as you thought. However, you can't improve as a magician without honest feedback.
The guys who have responded in this thread are knowledgeable in sleight of hand and experienced in performing. They have taken time that could have been spent on other things to provide you with sugggestions how to improve. My suggestion is to honestly listen to their advice and make changes in your effect.
Although I do not think that your effect would ever make it on the marketplace because neither the plot or the methods are original, you can turn it into something that you can perform and get great reactions.
Much of how we view our magic and the magic of others is based on where we are in our journey in learning magic. Starting out you have a certain level of knowledge but as you progress you find out that you didn't know as much as you thought. Truly, the more I learn, the more I discover how much I don't know.
My advice to you is to spend time learning and performing routines designed by others. Imitation comes before innovation. Learn the sleights but also learn what makes those effects work from a plot stand point. Learn from reputable sources - not YouTube (where most sleights are taught badly). The more you know the better you will become.