It could be better. I think you should try filming it from the front and up-close instead of the side. I think the lighting is just a tad bright for filming..maybe tone down the sunlight? Other than that, it's lookin' good Good luck in the contest man
I think that it is alright, I think that it could have been filmed in a better place as opposed to sitting in a chair. Some of the flourishes could have used a bit more practice, but other than that not too bad.