The Queens
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Your handling was good up until the fourth vanish, you flashed a bit.
Your patter was...boring and took away from your effect and some parts you did too slow, showing the 3 kings (you showed the fact that one king was missing too long).
Work on patter on the fourth vanish.
~PaCo
Your patter was...boring and took away from your effect and some parts you did too slow, showing the 3 kings (you showed the fact that one king was missing too long).
Work on patter on the fourth vanish.
~PaCo
It's a fairly good performance but there's a few areas that need a bit of work. You perform all the sleights quite well and i'm quite sure your spectators wouldn't see them however I think you could perform it a lot smoother. A couple of the vanishes seem slightly awkward, most notably the first and second ones and also the production at the end needs a bit more practice.
In my opinion part of the power of The Queens is it's elegance, which is missing in your performance.
Your doing a pretty good job and with a little bit of work on smoothness it will look really good.
In my opinion part of the power of The Queens is it's elegance, which is missing in your performance.
Your doing a pretty good job and with a little bit of work on smoothness it will look really good.
Slow and BORING. The way you spoke... wow have some enthusiasm.
Your twirls sucked big time. You tried to make it look flourishy, but in the end it was ugly.
Again, you went really slow... try to pace it up a little bit.
Your twirls sucked big time. You tried to make it look flourishy, but in the end it was ugly.
Again, you went really slow... try to pace it up a little bit.
Harsh...
The performance was alright, but you went too slow. It's supposed to be a fast, visual, smooth effect. You could improve on some of your sleights, and it wouldn't hurt to get some enthusiasm in your patter...
David
Ill be honest. It was a crap performance. Work on your patter. And make it faster and smoother.
JDEN
JDEN
Firstly, I want to say that it takes a brave soul to take on such a tough routine - this effect certainly is not an easy one to pull off, yet you even performed the effect with speech as well; and that is a feat in itself. Therefore, good work for that. 
However, there are a few notes that I think you may want to look into for future performances:
1) Handling
If I'm honest, I found your handling to be quite stiff at times; both when performing the sleights and when generally relaxing with the deck. Try and be casual about your handling - as to eliminate as much tension as possible. As it stands currently, I got a feeling that you didn't feel overly comfortable in your sleight of hand, and were definitely gripping the cards too tight. You must remember they are paper; not bricks, and so handle them lightly and loosely. I think I speak on many people's behalf when I say that it is in fact easier to accomplish sleights when the props are held loosely, then if they were held too tightly -- just something I felt needed to be pointed out.
2) Patter execution
Enthusiasm is a key that I didn't necessarily see here -- I felt no emotion in your speech and it soon became very taunting to watch. Try to engage your spectators with something that can relate to, rather than a simple "If I snap... there's only three." In my experience, good patter makes justifications for actions; or a sort of story to make your movements more enjoyable. Remember that the best performances are ones that engage the spectator emotionally, or can have them relate to it somehow -- rather than verbally narrating what they already see.
3 Overall Presentation
As for the presentation, I am sure you can think of something far more interesting - as it stand currently, it feels like an attempt at the boring patter provided in the Trilogy; it doesn't feel like "your" presentation at all. You will find that most of your great patter will come when you stop concentrating on the mechanics of a trick. You kind of have to try and visualize the effect; 'seeing' what the spectators see, and then brainstorm about it.
One premise that comes to mind when I think about "The Queens" routine is the subject of relationships; four women leave only to return again. I think that would make it something an audience could "connect" with emotionally. For instance, you could even use Tony Montana's line from Scarface; "She'll be back - another Quaalude, and she'll be mine again" when the Queens return at the end. However, do be careful with the premise, it will probably run the danger of offending the opposite sex if not worded properly - so tread with a caution!
Other performances with an interesting patter for the Queens come from Chris Hestnes and Victor Cruz. Both of these guys made me enjoy watching their performances, because they used an interesting patter that, in essence, got me interested in their actions. As always, I offer these points with no ego whatsoever - they were just some quick notes that I took that I thought should be made clear. I see huge potential in your performances - but with a couple of minor tweaks, I think they could be even better.
Thanks for sharing, I can't wait to see more.
Warm regards,
Jordan
However, there are a few notes that I think you may want to look into for future performances:1) Handling
If I'm honest, I found your handling to be quite stiff at times; both when performing the sleights and when generally relaxing with the deck. Try and be casual about your handling - as to eliminate as much tension as possible. As it stands currently, I got a feeling that you didn't feel overly comfortable in your sleight of hand, and were definitely gripping the cards too tight. You must remember they are paper; not bricks, and so handle them lightly and loosely. I think I speak on many people's behalf when I say that it is in fact easier to accomplish sleights when the props are held loosely, then if they were held too tightly -- just something I felt needed to be pointed out.
2) Patter execution
Enthusiasm is a key that I didn't necessarily see here -- I felt no emotion in your speech and it soon became very taunting to watch. Try to engage your spectators with something that can relate to, rather than a simple "If I snap... there's only three." In my experience, good patter makes justifications for actions; or a sort of story to make your movements more enjoyable. Remember that the best performances are ones that engage the spectator emotionally, or can have them relate to it somehow -- rather than verbally narrating what they already see.
3 Overall Presentation
As for the presentation, I am sure you can think of something far more interesting - as it stand currently, it feels like an attempt at the boring patter provided in the Trilogy; it doesn't feel like "your" presentation at all. You will find that most of your great patter will come when you stop concentrating on the mechanics of a trick. You kind of have to try and visualize the effect; 'seeing' what the spectators see, and then brainstorm about it.
One premise that comes to mind when I think about "The Queens" routine is the subject of relationships; four women leave only to return again. I think that would make it something an audience could "connect" with emotionally. For instance, you could even use Tony Montana's line from Scarface; "She'll be back - another Quaalude, and she'll be mine again" when the Queens return at the end. However, do be careful with the premise, it will probably run the danger of offending the opposite sex if not worded properly - so tread with a caution!
Other performances with an interesting patter for the Queens come from Chris Hestnes and Victor Cruz. Both of these guys made me enjoy watching their performances, because they used an interesting patter that, in essence, got me interested in their actions. As always, I offer these points with no ego whatsoever - they were just some quick notes that I took that I thought should be made clear. I see huge potential in your performances - but with a couple of minor tweaks, I think they could be even better.
Thanks for sharing, I can't wait to see more.
Warm regards,
Jordan
Firstly, I want to say that it takes a brave soul to take on such a tough routine - this effect certainly is not an easy one to pull off, yet you even performed the effect with speech as well; and that is a feat in itself. Therefore, good work for that.
1) Handling
If I'm honest, I found your handling to be quite stiff at times; both when performing the sleights and when generally relaxing with the deck. Try and be casual about your handling - as to eliminate as much tension as possible. As it stands currently, I got a feeling that you didn't feel overly comfortable in your sleight of hand, and were definitely gripping the cards too tight. You must remember they are paper; not bricks, and so handle them lightly and loosely. I think I speak on many people's behalf when I say that it is in fact easier to accomplish sleights when the props are held loosely, then if they were held too tightly -- just something I felt needed to be pointed out.
2) Patter execution
Enthusiasm is a key that I didn't necessarily see here -- I felt no emotion in your speech and it soon became very taunting to watch. Try to engage your spectators with something that can relate to, rather than a simple "If I snap... there's only three." In my experience, good patter makes justifications for actions; or a sort of story to make your movements more enjoyable. Remember that the best performances are ones that engage the spectator emotionally, or can have them relate to it somehow -- rather than verbally narrating what they already see.
3 Overall Presentation
As for the presentation, I am sure you can think of something far more interesting - as it stand currently, it feels like an attempt at the boring patter provided in the Trilogy; it doesn't feel like "your" presentation at all. You will find that most of your great patter will come when you stop concentrating on the mechanics of a trick. You kind of have to try and visualize the effect; 'seeing' what the spectators see, and then brainstorm about it.
One premise that comes to mind when I think about "The Queens" routine is the subject of relationships; four women leave only to return again. I think that would make it something an audience could "connect" with emotionally. For instance, you could even use Tony Montana's line from Scarface; "She'll be back - another Quaalude, and she'll be mine again" when the Queens return at the end. However, do be careful with the premise, it will probably run the danger of offending the opposite sex if not worded properly - so tread with a caution!
Other performances with an interesting patter for the Queens come from Chris Hestnes and Victor Cruz. Both of these guys made me enjoy watching their performances, because they used an interesting patter that, in essence, got me interested in their actions. As always, I offer these points with no ego whatsoever - they were just some quick notes that I took that I thought should be made clear. I see huge potential in your performances - but with a couple of minor tweaks, I think they could be even better.
Thanks for sharing, I can't wait to see more.
Warm regards,
Jordan
Wow man! thanks for the feedback.
I'll make another video later
Alot of users here could learn alot from that post by Jordan Lapping. There is no reason to be so assy about your posts guys, try some constructive criticism.
I think u really did good but u have to get in the groove of things u get what i'm say'in. Make it fun.Other than that u just have to practice a little more and
u will have it down pat.
Till then work hard.
u will have it down pat.
Till then work hard.