I like what you're trying to do, but I think it takes away from the impossibility of the effect, and when you recap the trick, it lets the spectator expect what's coming.. Rethink the patter as not to reveal the upcoming card, and it'll be alot better.
And your "Where's the three? here? no, it's actually here"-move isn't fooling me - keep the cards closer to eachother, less outjog, more sliding action.
but again - i like you creativity, I'm just trying to give constructive criticism